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Started by ExShadow, December 30, 2009, 04:04:15 pm
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1 Written Poem
#1  December 30, 2009, 04:04:15 pm
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A poem that I wrote recently

Alas...one life good for another,
Taking hands, taking hearts loving each other,
Our mind body and soul so weak yet so strong getting through each day together,
So many so unhappy, grieved, and angry.

One lost life, one lost love,
Destroyed, broken, thrown away,
How much longer must we listen to those things that they say.

Mind so empty,
Mind so blank,
The very thoughts of them so ruff, so unclear and uneasy,
They say bad sayings,
They put us down,
Things so horrible that we fall all the way to the ground..

So frustrated with life,
So frustrated with love,
So frustrated with the people who say they are rising you above.

You stumble,
You tremble,
Making choices, don't look back,
So Vague, so distant, so dangerous and black,

Those very thoughts kill the joy of loving,
Tread easy keep loving, moving on past those hating.
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#2  December 30, 2009, 04:25:58 pm
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I enjoyed it thank you.
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#3  December 30, 2009, 05:28:17 pm
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So Vague, so distant, so dangerous and black,
:no:

just kidding, nice poem. reminded me of the song "Lover's Spit" by Broken Social Scene, especially as regards the following lines:

All these people drinking lover's spit
Swallowing words while giving head
They listen to teeth to learn how to quit
Better take some hand and get used to it


in poor words, the couple vs. the world?
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#4  December 30, 2009, 06:50:47 pm
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lol, that made me "lol" XD

thanks