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Started by SiL3Nt J, November 28, 2012, 06:45:31 am
Rate my original character? Aisu Dokuro the Albino from Antarctica that uses Ice
#1  November 28, 2012, 06:45:31 am
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Created this character a little over 10 years ago when I was 15. I originally intended him for Street Fighter because I always thought it would be cool to have a character who was an albino. Also, I wanted to make a character from Antarctica... even though his name is Japanese :p He's basically just a cross between Ryu and Iceman. I always pictured him doing some sort of ice-kick projectile which uses the same animation as Ken's standing roundhouse kick in the Alpha / SF3 series. Well, finally made a sprite today after all this time. I actually have about 20 other characters that I had created for my own game at one point but no sprites of them yet. Aisu's basically just a head swap right now, but this is how I intended him to look. Also, his last name is "Dokuro." Saw on an online English to Japanese translation site that "Aisu" means "Ice" in Japanese and "Dokuro" is "Skull." Don't know why, but I thought that sounded cool:

EDIT: Fixed the pants:




EDIT, took out the other links:



EDIT: Added a story for him:

- He was abandoned in Antarctica as a baby, his mother was a Japanese scientist who lost him during a storm, and then he was raised by wolves.

- He learned to fight by mimicking their movements and practicing his punches and kicks on ice blocks.

- When he was a teenager, he began studying karate and learned how to kick projectiles of ice from his leg after he met an old witch who lived in a house by a cave who showed him how to channel his energy.

- His mom was a scientist and had no where to leave him back home. She was sent there along with a group of researchers because they had been getting some disturbing signals from a satellite they had placed down there. They were moitoring some of the life down there like Polar Bears and Wolves

- At least I think there are wolves in Antarctica... if not, then he learned from bears

- The reason the wolves didn't eat him was because for 1) he was too cold, his blood is cold which allows him to not only survive freezing temperatures, but also makes his skin freezing and for 2) one of their cubs discovered him and began playing with him, the wolves decided to let him live because of this. Lol, I was thinking Jungle Book in a different setting sort of.

- He made clothes out of the skins of dead animals as he was growing up, but the pants that he's wearing in the picture aresome that he stole from one of the scientists.

- One of his mom's co-workers was a Karate Master. They discovered him living in the woods when he was a teenager and took him in. Don't know if I'll have him re-unite with his mom or not though.
Last Edit: December 02, 2012, 10:30:22 am by SiL3Nt J
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#2  November 28, 2012, 09:56:22 am
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You know Aisu is just "Ice" phonetically sounded out in Japanese syllables, right? The actual Japanese word is "koori."

That's like saying you want to give a Japanese character a name for the color blue, but naming him BURUU. Or you want to name a guy after a shark, so you call him SHAAKU. Or you want to name a guy after your favorite sex move, so you call him ANARU FISUTINGU.

Also nice Grandpa Fei-Long with hair gel. And again with the red shoes. WHY.
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#3  November 28, 2012, 04:17:56 pm
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Hmmm.... I didn't know that. I saw the word koori as one of the options but I just thought Aisu looked better when spelled... Btw, not sure why I gave him red shoes, just thought it made him a little more colorful and less boring. Also, I liked Ryu's red shoes in the original SF. I changed his skin tone to make him look a little more like an albino, lol, btw, I didn't use fei long as a base for the body, only for the head:

http://img402.imageshack.us/img402/8886/aisuv3.png
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#4  November 28, 2012, 04:48:00 pm
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Maybe you should make one thread for your stuff? I mean seriously you have like two threads right on top of eachother. Also, you may want to use the (img)(/img) tags for your pictures. Replace the ()'s with []
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#5  November 28, 2012, 08:29:21 pm
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#6  November 28, 2012, 08:44:51 pm
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Look at the cursor:


Niko said that instead of writing the parenthesis "(" and ")" you should write the brackets "[" and "]".
This is an example:


Try to quote me, you'll see what he and I mean.
Also, don't use attachments, they don't work.

Last Edit: November 28, 2012, 08:49:44 pm by G.o.D.
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#7  November 28, 2012, 10:06:25 pm
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Ok cool, just revised the first post. Btw, this was my latest version, changed the hair color to make it a little lighter. I think this is about as good as I can get it.
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#8  November 28, 2012, 10:36:06 pm
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I actually like this one.
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#9  December 01, 2012, 07:29:55 am
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Thanks Erroratu. Btw, here's another original character I made: Strawberry, the Kendo Hooker. Her story:

She learned Kendo from her father who was a Kendo master in Louisiana. She actually did quite well in it too, winning several national championships as a child/early teen. She even beat her older sister Mimi. However, after her parents were murdered, her sister and she went their own separate ways and decided to side on opposite sides of the law. Strawberry is the younger sister btw. She gave up fighting for the most part and became a hooker because she realized it was an easy way to make money and score drugs. Also, she figured that if the cops couldn't protect her parents, that it was useless to follow the law and rely on the police. Her sister felt differently and joined the police force in order to help prevent things like what happened to their parents from happening to anyone else.

Strawberry doesn't fight often now days. The only time she ever fights is when she's defending herself or collecting money from a reluctant client of hers. Also, she has no pimp as she is self employed. She still carries around her Kendo stick though in case she needs to jack someone up.

Btw, I tried to base her off of Traci Bingham from Baywatch. That's who's in the picture on the right. Here's the sprite I made of her:

Last Edit: December 01, 2012, 04:27:58 pm by SiL3Nt J
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#10  December 01, 2012, 10:10:33 am
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Looks like Storm's head on Rogue's body, and I can't fully explain that bust
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#11  December 01, 2012, 04:28:49 pm
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Lol, it's actually Rogue's body and head with Billy Kane's bandana and stick.

      Posted: December 02, 2012, 10:12:55 am
I made a few alternates of him. The one on the far left was actually how I intended him to look. I just didn't have the time to draw the pants that way:



      Posted: December 03, 2012, 12:13:53 am
Alright, here's one last character of mine. His name is Osore Zetsumei. He cut his eyes out of his head, but he's psychic so he's a b**** to fight against. He was originally going to be the boss of my game. I think Zetsumei means death in Japanese and Osore is horror. Also, I think that's the symbol for death on his chest. That's what google said.



Btw, here's where I got the inspiration, I'm a Slayer fan:

http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_me5xn7XF4S1rakjv2o1_1280.jpg

      Posted: December 04, 2012, 04:43:13 am
Here's another, it looks like shit, it's a very rough version, but his name is End Man. He has a metallic jaw and fights with his hands behind his back:



      Posted: December 04, 2012, 06:31:40 am

Alright. He's bad ass now:

Last Edit: December 04, 2012, 09:29:05 am by SiL3Nt J
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#12  December 05, 2012, 12:57:15 pm
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not badass cuz he have a sticker on the chest, make a simbol that follow the skin/mucles anatomy lines!
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#13  December 05, 2012, 07:32:01 pm
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Lol, well how's this:

or is this one better:

Btw, what do you think of End Man?
Last Edit: December 05, 2012, 07:35:33 pm by SiL3Nt J
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#14  December 05, 2012, 07:53:10 pm
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End Man needs shading on his pants.
Oh and try to be more original with the OC next time.I mean,the guys name is Aisu(Which sounds like Ice),hes from antarctica,and he uses ice.
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#15  December 05, 2012, 10:30:22 pm
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You need the Bird to blend in with his skin. With pal. Separation.
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#16  December 06, 2012, 02:15:29 am
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Thanks for the feedback so far. Here's another character of mine named Enten. I have a version with a tattoo and one without:





Also, the End Man edit doesn't have lots of shading because for him I just recolored an edit without lots of shading. I may go back and fix it later but I fixed the Aisu tattoo... at least I think I did:



      Posted: December 06, 2012, 08:37:34 am
I updated Aisu one more time too. Here are a couple of updates to his storyline before I post the pic:

- He learned how to make objects out of ice from Nightfall, the witch who lived in the cave in Antarctica. However, before his training was finished, he left and went on his own. For this reason, the objects he makes out of ice are durable, but not unbreakable like the objects Nightfall can make.

- The reason I say this is because I want to give him a move called the "Ice Saber" where he makes a sword out of ice that he can temporarily use. This is similar to Ice Man's "Ice Fist." The strength of the sword depends on the strength of the button used. Light punch swords last one hit, medium punch swords last two hits, and heavy punch swords last 3 hits. Also, if he gets his before he uses all of the hits from the sword, it drops to the ground and shatters to pieces. It also shatters after the last hit is used. But it functions similarly to Cody's knife in SFA3.

- Also, the name "Aisu" was a name given to him by Nightfall. She's the one that found him when he was a baby. "Aisu" was his first word he ever said. He was talking about the ice outside and ever since then, she has decided to call him this. It ended up being his name.

- Well here's the pic. Also, I made the bird blue:



      Posted: December 06, 2012, 09:36:52 am
Can't decide which version I like best. Thoughts?



      Posted: December 06, 2012, 05:07:26 pm
Here's Leech. I'm not really happy with the way the blood stains turned out, but at least you can see what he looks like:



      Posted: December 06, 2012, 10:04:03 pm
Here's another w.i.p. of mine: Redbird



Here's another one I'm working on: Fantasma:

Last Edit: December 07, 2012, 08:36:48 am by SiL3Nt J
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#17  December 07, 2012, 05:31:42 pm
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Some of your images don't show up.

-About Aisu tattoo, I think you should use the first because he uses the ice, but with a bit more contrast on the colours;
-about Leech, the arm that holds the knife has a different palette (comparing with the other, I can see the one I mentioned is more yellow);
-I can't see Redbird;
-why did you leave the third image (Fantasma)?

Work more on the anti alias, it will make your image/sprite better.

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#18  December 07, 2012, 05:58:05 pm
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Here's a pic of redbird and my other characters that I have so far. She's the 4th one from the left. Also, I left the third Fantasma image just because it was late last night and I was tired. But what do you mean about working on the anti alias?

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#19  December 07, 2012, 07:09:18 pm
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about working on the anti alias?
You need to make characters edges look more smooth
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#20  December 07, 2012, 11:00:08 pm
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Cool. Thanks. I drew another version of Aisu with a badly drawn dragon that I'll fix later, or at least try to:




     Posted: December 08, 2012, 11:03:25 am
Edited Fantasma. He's about finished:

Last Edit: December 08, 2012, 11:03:25 am by SiL3Nt J