Feedback on game sprite(s)

[Chronojiuj]

Currently working on a non-mugen platform-shooting game (lot's of progress actually for once!) and I need feedback on a sprite. Once I make enough progress with the actual game I'll post more sprites for feedback.

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Name is ssoecop and it doesn't like the current state of reality.

[Iced]

..it sortof looks like a midget woman being raped by tentacles that are also connecting to her arm sockets, the tentacles have blood both on the ground and the connecting areas .  What is it supposed to be?

[Chronojiuj]

Lol hentai, I tried achieving the look of fluttering tags, but I guess that's harder than I thought.

Spoiler: what it shall be  ingame, be warned of unnecessary plot elements! (click to show)

It is one of the 'stillborn', an eldritch horror (thus the no lower legs and bloodily connected tags). 15 of these things are born from the the mother during the birthings of existence and try to shepherd reality into perfection. When this one witnesses the 5th galactic war, it tries to re-awaken the child, which in turn would re-awaken the mother who herself consumes existence (and everything in it) and gives birth to a new one, and starting the cycle again.

I develop the story a bit much I think.

[Iced]

Okay if those are fluttering, maybe its better to remove the red areas on the connections of the legs, and have the bits attached to the body being more spread , as they are now they look like those are inserting on her body instead of connecting to it, have maybe some veins or something spread around the zone and remove some pixels from the connection line, thus making it look more like something that is hanging instead of inserted.

[Edtion]

Maybe you should make line art and then show a comparison from a detailed look, to what the sprite look like so we don't have to use our imagination to figure out what it is 

[Chronojiuj]

have the bits attached to the body being more spread

When you say this, do you mean as in spreading the ends of the hanging parts?

Maybe you should make line art and then show a comparison from a detailed look, to what the sprite look like so we don't have to use our imagination to figure out what it is 

I can't draw at all. But I'll try anyway.

[Iced]

the parts that are attached to the body, as they are now they look like tubes sticking into orifices.

[Chronojiuj]

Well before I attempt the spread, here's a separate, possibly more coherent version I had incase the blood didn't look too good.

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[Chronojiuj]

And here's a shitty-arsed vector of what it is supposed to look like, I've decided.

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[FeLo_Llop]

Is that Lady Gaga's new outfit?

Just joking !!

Take care with her "legs"(or that's what i think...legs..I hope those to be legs), the way are done they seems 2 penis with bloody glandes, aside the fact the penis is really larger than the legs...

Anyway, I like the design, good job !!

[Iced]

yeah remove the blood on the conectors to the body, shoulders etc. it looks clearer.

[Chronojiuj]

Hmm, so no connections and in need of fixing the legs. Righto I'll see what I can do.

[Chronojiuj]

Double post because I picture. I've somewhat smoothed the tags, removed the connections and made the legs a bit more mangled.

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In the originally original design the tag on the front was supposed to look like something else, but I'm not sure if I can upload an edited sprite containing it without some backlash.

[Iced]

FURRY BULLSHIT, ahem hm yeah, i dont think that GIANT DONG is exactly something that looks apropriate there.

[Chronojiuj]

Iced the original original design was supposed to represent both the male and female form.

But if it doesn't look like it would suit it then righto.

[Iced]

gigantic bits of male or female anatomy is rarely the way to go if you want to be subtle. it would end up looking like a parody-

[Chronojiuj]

Lol ok. I can see how.

[Chronojiuj]

Ok now I've been listening to the iced's new groove and have changed a few things. For better or worse you tell me:

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[Iced]

i think it looks way better, more imcomplete and less sexual in a whole.

[TITAN MADRE]

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