My game with my characters

[Dj luke]

Hello Mugen People!

I am thinking about making my mugen game, probably Open bor.








Above u have stances  majority characters.
I would like to do game like street of rage something like that.

[Orochi Gill]

Moved to Graphics due to there only being sprites/animations.

[Nexus Games]

don't you have to have more then 3 animations for it to be in projects?
there are more than 3 animations here

[Dj luke]

Thanks for support Nexus Games.

[MotorRoach]

don't you have to have more then 3 animations for it to be in projects?
there are more than 3 animations here

More than 3 animations... per character. One animation per character still doesn't proves there's constant progress being made on all or even one of them.

[Dj luke]

Stop arguing you have better talk about topic people!

[AlexSin]

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There's not much to say about this topic.
You have characters whom you've created based on KoF characters, you said you want to make the game like Streets of Rage and nothing else.

You didn't even write a story.

Also what MotorRoach says is correct.

[Dj luke]

Hello Sin
Thanks for response. Now I am little busy, but later I will show the storyline.

[MotorRoach]

Being serious, though, your character designs are... not interesting. At all.

I'm not saying this to be mean, but I can easily tell that most of these were just head swaps of existing KOF/FF characters. I heavily recommend that you try to take more liberties with editing their designs more in order to make them more unique, and not just swap their head or upper bodies.

[Dj luke]

Hello MotorRoach
It is obvious what have you said. For example look at Gustab Munchausen, Rozwel etc.. These characters are also not made from zero . I say it one more time I am beginner, and not many people here want to share with me their knowledge. I don't even know why? Another example  one of my favourite mugen creator Chuoryu, his character Shao Khan, isn't it a only CVS sagat with helmet? Have a nice day , take care! Thanks for honest repsonse. I really apreciatte it!

[MotorRoach]

I never thought fondly of Gustab, Rowzel, or any of Chuchoryu's creations. Telling me that other creations didn't try to look unique doesn't makes your work look any better, because it still looks just as bad to me.

I'm not saying you have to create your characters from scratch, I'm saying that your characters are literally someone with a different head, and that you didn't bother to even edit their outfits or bodies at all. Try to compare it to many lazily put together Mugen characters as you want, but I will still see your Aldon as Kyo with a swollen face and a haircut, because that's literally what it is.

If you care about making your designs interesting, then make them not be just quickly made head swaps. Actually bother to change something in their outfits, or body, or anything.

[Dj luke]

 You are little funny. Giving mark after seeing one percent of character.... I thought u guys will tell something worthy not saying ...... I am not comparing to anyone but thats true that gustab has got only head new and effects and body from old character. You dont even give a try? I will not edit Aldon outfit beacause it is my idea. I did little changes. Why are u so pessimistic? If u think thaht its ugly and it will be ugly just say and it will be enough mark. Its too quick to mark, isnt it?

Story
Aldon is exprisoner.He escaped from prison which exsisted in cosmos. Take small spaceship and go to Earth. If u want to read more just say. Have a nice day!

[AlexSin]

Just to be honest,

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You are little funny. Giving mark after seeing one percent of character...

What are we supposed to do? Stay silent? But if you want people to talk about this...

I thought u guys will tell something worthy not saying ...

What did he just do?!?
He gave you some suggestions to improve your characters quality, that you can always ignore (like I'm sure you'll do).

I am not comparing to anyone but thats true that gustab has got only head new and effects and body from old character.

You are not comparing other characters with yours, yet you bring them up and compare them... do you see it doesn't sound right?

You dont even give a try?

What does that mean? What is that about?

[...] If u think thaht its ugly and it will be ugly just say and it will be enough mark. Its too quick to mark, isnt it?

Here's the deal, people give you constructive criticism to make you improve.

Saying
"it sucks"
"it's ugly"
"it's bad"
helps no one. It might make you upset, just that. Only negativity.

Saying
"cool char"
"nice"
"great"
helps no one. It might make you happy, but only for a brief moment. It's not really needed.

Giving suggestions such as
"you could change the character's body build"
"perhaps you should design a different outfit"
"the stance looks too similar to a KoF character's, you could try to change it"
might help you change your point of view, it might make you try new things and thus improvement.

[...]
I will not edit Aldon outfit beacause it is my idea. I did little changes.
[...]
Story
Aldon is exprisoner. He escaped from prison which exsisted in cosmos. Take small spaceship and go to Earth. If u want to read more just say. Have a nice day!

It doesn't look like an ex-prisoner (maybe except for the face). Everything else screams "Kyo" or "school boy".
I think it would need a totally different outfit, but hey, it's your idea.

[Dj luke]

I like when people are honest. Yod didnt write if want to hear more story. You didnt tell about details so much, but it maybe too small to discusse. Silence is bad, prefer criticism. About comparing you might be right but many characters are the same. Last your sentence are the best. So people can have prisoners faces? Thank you for your time I am learning day by day. Can u write f.e. two sentences about each character?

[AlexSin]

Last your sentence are the best. So people can have prisoners faces?

Oh come on, you know what I meant!
I think it needs some fixes, but his face looks like he's got into many troubles, so it's fine.

Can u write f.e. two sentences about each character?

I, or anybody else, can't really criticize them, because we don't know the story.
(that means I want you to write the story )

[Dj luke]

Sin you are good mate, I like you. Maybe I will learn something from you.
===Few words about characters==
Aldon - Based on kyo and lucky glauber I guess sprites. His attacks will be based on fire control so u could be bored( another clone of kyo but I will do my best to add some new which make him different but it will be simillar)
Gary - Based on benimaru little edit different pallete thats all I would like to give him capoeira some moves.
Victor - Based on Gato and wild terry body. Some throws wrestling skills I will add maybe one kick.
Mike - Based on Duke
Lukas - Based on Geese and Malenko legs. Honestly I have problem with legs. He will be cheap character
Frank - Goenitz and geese sprites
Greg - it will be the most difficult to create lack of sprites.
Snake Marcus ' Based on Geese and trevor body.

===Story===
As i said Aldon main character escaped from cosmic prison which belongs to huge gang/mafia/organisation. He moved to Earth and the story begins. He wanted to destroy that organisation but he needs help.
Gary, Victor, Mike will join him during the story.
Gary is the young man, who is govermant agent but nobody knows it. He is also friend of Aldon.
Victor ex champion of wrestling/ underground fighting.
Mike is random guy at the begining but during the plot his story will be showned.
Frank and Greg bussines associate or brothers, bosses of mafia which is contected with prison.
Lukas is above them. He  is watcher and he told them to catch Aldon. If the fail they will lose something.
Snake Marcus is exsoldier, psychopatic, empoyee of mafia.

Thats all for now

[AlexSin]

You've got a good story there. I have some questions but I feel like I'm going a bit off thread (this topic being in the Graphics board and all).
Anyway,
- why was Aldon in prison?
- Why and how does Victor join him in the fight?
  Perhaps you could write that he was blackmailed by one of the mafia agents to lose fights, but he couldn't stand it. Now the "how he met him" part remains...
- Frank and Greg don't seem like bad guys if they weren't ordered around by Lukas, or they're still 'evil' but not 'very evil'. Is that the impression you want to give?

[DatKofGuy]

I like the part where he says "ask if you want to edit" then right below is an edit of Trevor Spacey.

To echo motor roach... all I'm seeing is head swaps and color edits, Nothing of their designs are even related to their back story....

Also, would probably be a good idea to label each character so we know who is who.

Lastly, if you looking for feel good praises and +1 great char, you should probably post in the MMV forums....

[Metal Warrior]

Please, give credit to the authors, like Trevor Spacer from Evil Orochi. This isn't cool.

[Dj luke]

I am on holiday now but.... It is a trevor edit  for now but in future it will be different character. As u see sprites are borrowed. Sentence about editin characers curenttly is a joke, because there are no characters now only sprites. Please dont take everything so serious.